Do you think that measures like this are necessary for the health of the nation? Is it a step towards helping to cub the growing obesity problem? Do you think this bill is actually directed at keeping PEOPLE from drinking large amounts of soda? or does it have other intentions?
Again, in your case for or against this concept you need to do the following -
- Summarize the main point of the article and identify which position you take (AFFirmative or NEGation)
- Use evidence from at least 2 other sources to support your evaluation of the argument put forth in the original piece
- Use appropriate quotation format and cite your sources
- Write 300-500 words (proofreading is critical)
In this Article, Micheal Bloomberg proposes to bad sugary drinks over 16oz. I am outraged at this, and I disagree with this passing. 'This is America, land of the plenty!' Having this law put in place, makes it harder for families to share a drinks at movies and other various places. Because of this, there will be more garbage to be added to land fills.In this Article, Micheal Bloomberg proposes to bad sugary drinks over 16oz. I am outraged at this, and I disagree with this passing. This is America, land of the plenty! Having this law put in place, makes it harder for families to share a drinks at movies and other various places. Because of this, there will be more garbage to be added to land fills. I understand where he is coming from, wanting to help bring down obesity, but, soda's are not the cause of it. It's lack of poor diet and exerciser. That's why Mayor Bloomberg shouldn't be able to put a ban on soda sizes!
ReplyDeleteSources: http://www.cbsnews.com/8301-504763_162-57451372-10391704/mayor-bloombergs-soda-ban-proposal-to-be-submitted-to-nyc-health-board-today/
http://www.nytimes.com/2012/06/12/nyregion/persistent-obesity-fuels-soda-ban-by-bloomberg.html?pagewanted=all
http://www.cbsnews.com/8301-504763_162-57456252-10391704/big-soda-ban-proposed-by-mayor-of-cambridge-mass/
http://www.colbertnation.com/the-colbert-report-videos/414705/may-31-2012/michael-bloomberg-s-supersized-soda-scheme
-Shannon Kopp
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DeleteGreat job on this one! You cited credible sources, which helps the validity of your argument. Clearly stating your sources And making sure they are reliable will save valuable questioning time and gain you respect in competitions. Also, great use of strong words and persuasive tones. Language and phrasing are your best friend when it comes to writing speeches. My only tip in making your argument stronger is to make sure that your whole speech ties in together. It can confuse the reader or listener and make a speech or essay hard to follow if you don't use transitions and have a consistent theme in your speech. Overall, though, I'd say you did a fantastic job with this article! Can't wait to see what else you do this year! :)
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ReplyDeleteVery nice Shannon, short, sweet, and to the point. You provided good examples in which you can always expand on, like if you need to add time and/or body to a speech, along with clear transitions so if you were reading this out loud, a listener would follow your train of thought. Good job with finding credible sources, the only thing I would suggest is to use slightly stronger transitions words to make sure the reader is aware of your move to a different supporting argument, such as "to begin", "secondly", and "lastly", but this format (called sign posting) is really only used when you are going to be saying your speech.
ReplyDeleteOtherwise, your speech was excellent and sounded very nature. I can't wait to see you and your skill! :)
-Kelsey Williams
According to the statistics mentioned in the article, over 35% of Americans are drastically overweight, 22% of those people being full blown obese. Twenty-two percent of Americans are so fat that they are lumped into a whole new category of fat people who share the displeasing commonality of being 20% above normal weight. Disgusting. Now obviously Mayor Bloomberg is trying to scale this number down to a reasonable and acceptable crowd of slightly less fat people by creating a mandatory law that reduces the size of soft drinks to a minimum of 16 ounces, but honestly, what is that going to do? I can easily buy multiple smaller drink sizes to make up for the bigger size. And while he has good intentions, Bloomberg's idea simultaneously disarms the public of their right to put on as much weight as they choose. Boom, two reasons off the bat and I'm not even warmed up yet. I can find other loopholes in this loophole-ridden plan if I honestly felt like looking at the technicalities, but I don't. Regardless, I know that Bloomberg is trying to help us out, because we DEFINITELY need all the help we can get when it comes to obesity, but he's going to have to come up with a better contrivance than taking away our freedom of soda consumption.
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Sources:
http://www.cdc.gov/obesity/data/adult.html/
http://www.huffingtonpost.com/2012/06/04/new-york-soda-ban_n_1567816.html
Excellent Parker, I like it. Now obviously you cannot be so (openly) sarcastic in the usual Congress setting, but overall you seem to have it down. Though, while stating statistics you would want to supply the listener with the source right off the bat so they don't waste your time asking "Senator, where did you get your sources". (though that would also be a great place to use your sarcastic powers). Great job! Looking forward to debating with you. :)
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I'll try to keep the sarcasm down to a minimum. And I look forward to debating you as well!
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